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Fri, Sep. 10th, 2004, 08:46 pm
love_just_is15:

This is a song I wrote and it is acutally true. I would like to see what other people think... feedback and everything is welcomed. Just tell me what could be improved and so on. here it is in LJ cut.


 


 


(This song, you just have to read, it how I feel sometimes and how I am going through life as a person and how I am struggling as a person. Basically all the songs are about how I’ve struggled in life. Read it and you will find out)</o:p>


 


Obstacles


 


(Little keyboard solo here, very soft and sort of tone)


 


You’re running around in circles,


and you don’t know where the end of the line is.


It confuses you and it hurts you.


Your mind begins to spin around.


When-- will-- this—madness-- stop!? (Music stops abruptly, then starts up again in 5 4 3 2 1)


 


(Thus, the rest of the band comes in, and the keyboard goes into pop rock rhythm playing a few chords, yet unknown as of right now)


 


Chorus


You turn to my right hoping you can escape


Another light appears


But as you get closer to the li-ight


(Very slow) A-nother—dent—is—formed (Piano has a little solos during this and then the whole entire band join in still going at a slow tempo)


 


As you look through the light


You see a friend in need.


You run to him, but the light will


Not let you through ough


 


Chorus


You turn to my right hoping you can escape


another light appears


But as you get closer to the li-ight


(Very slow) A-nother—dent—is—formed (Piano has a little solos during this and then the whole entire band join in still going at a slow tempo)


 


As you run, run, towards the light


It gets farther and farther away.


You finally reached the place


You jump through the light


 


Then you looked around and more obstacles.


 


Chorus


You turn to my right hoping you can escape… (Little pause, bass or electric does chord)


You see another light


As you get closer to the li-ight


Another dent is formed. (Piano has a little solos during this and then the whole entire band join in still going at a slow tempo)


 


(Goes into a fast tempo but close to the end it gets slower when you get to end)


 


All because becauauause….


 


You’re running around in circles,


in obstacles of your life,


When—will—they-- ennnnnnd?! (Is held for about 10 seconds, the music becomes slower then gets up to tempo, then music stops for a bit for theses last words)


 


(When singing this without any music playing it is very slow)  It-- will never end(Stops a bit for about 3 seconds then goes straight to) those obstacles


 


(Music begins to play. there is a conclusion, a very soft tempo and then it goes into the bass with one last chord.)


 

Fri, Oct. 1st, 2004 04:55 pm (UTC)
love_just_is15: Re: terrific

I'd be honoured.